tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5545664577194758274.post5634431913140646574..comments2020-02-24T05:38:55.830-08:00Comments on Victoria :): A day that went bad...Victoria D.http://www.blogger.com/profile/09800986173719703798noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5545664577194758274.post-27232195356996692162010-01-05T12:04:22.497-08:002010-01-05T12:04:22.497-08:00Victoria, I just read your story and I think that ...Victoria, I just read your story and I think that it is really good. The main idea of “A day that went bad…” is great, because it concerns all the people around the world and reminds most the readers of their personal stories when one little mistake led to many others. I like the fact that you started the story with the passage that describes the spilling of the bottle that contained detergent, because it kind of suggests what is the main theme, but yet does not tell enough information. I was really interested what was going to happen and you kept my interest to the very end of your story. It is nice that you are observing two different daily routines and points of view, that get mixed at the some point, at once: “It was an autumn rainy day several years ago. Little children were approaching the school eager to see each other, talk, and laugh.”, “Ms. Ani Nowal was having a tuff day from the moment her alarm went on.”. The only think I did not like that there were several grammar and stylistic mistakes but as a whole I loved your story and I believe that you are a pretty good writer.Donikahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16883316823358702350noreply@blogger.com